The person she admire the most

Checking this post, I found some mistakes, so I highlighted them in a list showed below:

“…for example what happen after death?...”
…for example, what happens after death

“…Why is life unfair for some of us?...”
…why life is unfair for some of us

“…Finally I would ask him to meet to his father…”
…finally, I would ask him to meet his father

“…I would do more questions…”
…I would ask more questions

“…we believe God is energy …”
…we believe that god is energy

“…his gorgeous energy in home…“
…his gorgeous energy at home